Heyhey!
I've read your application, and I see you've found the formula to use.
Still, seeing that we changed our policy a bit recently, and your IC part is too short for me to make any decisions. I'm not satisfied enough with that, could you provĂde some more?
You can add more lines into your letter, telling more about your character, his motivations, ideals and such. Or you can write his background, story so to say. Or if you feel creative enough, write an actual story about your character! We don't need doorstoppers, but still a bit more than what you provided.
So, I'll be waiting for your reply, I hope you'll give me some juicy text to chew on!
See you soon